Chance Music
the wind is sighing, sighing through the trees
and sets to trembling leaves along the way
listen! a concert rises out of these
it isn’t just an errant little breeze
that makes the boughs and branches dip and sway
come watch the wind conduct with expertise!
basso profundo rolls from pines with ease
the hemlock’s baritone comes into play
listen! a concert rises out of these
can you not hear the maple’s tenor tease
or catch the alto of the elm at play?
come watch the wind conduct with expertise!
the volume dips and rises by degrees
depending on which way the breezes stray
listen! a concert rises out of these
if only nature granted a reprise
I’m sure I miss a concert every day
not giving any heed to trembling leaves
come watch! the wind conducts with expertise!
12 comments:
I hear that song a lot and have a hard time not being outside to enjoy it.
ah whata beautiful nature song you have captured...just the music i love to hear...
i don't remember much from H.S. English about writing poetry, except for strings of repetitive letters, but this is wonderful! makes me think I should have paid better attention. I especially love how the rhyme doesn't always come at the end of a line.....
As intricate as lace!
You love a challenge poetically speaking, Pauline, and always rise, not only up to, but above it.
I love listening to nature's symphony and your poem captured it perfectly!
Oh, I love this poem, and I'm so glad I didn't miss it! I've been off the computer a lot this summer...
We had Wind and Lightning and Thunder last night...I wish I had read this poem before it happened. The Wind certainly did conduct with expertise...I love this line! And a concert surely did rise out of it!
So great...thanks so much! xx
You are amongst many trees, as am I but only a stiff breeze produces the sounds indicated.
But I will listen . . .
A beautiful reminder of the lovely "Free Treats" life offers.
OOTP - it's my favorite kind of music
Brian M - me too!
Molly, for the life of me I can't remember what form this is - a villanelle maybe but the rhyming doesn't seem quite right for that. I marked most of my poems with the form I was trying out, except this one.
J - a neat description though I find making lace much more difficult.
Thanks Barbara S!
Marion - the melodies the wind creates fascinate me
Goatman, sometimes the tunes are very whispery but even the slightest breeze will make a song...
So true, Meggie!
It's lovely.
Does the form have a name? There is a lot of rhythm to it, I read it out loud.
Rhyme and rhythm may be deemed old-fashioned, but I always enjoy a modern view cast into classical form (not sure if this metaphor works, though). In enjoy both the music you write and the music you evoke, Pauline.
Friko - I think it's a villanelle but I may be wrong. Usually when I'm trying out forms I make a note of what is is but I forgot on this one. I think all poetry sounds better read aloud!
tms - I like both rhyme and rhythm and find them a useful and worthy challenge. Thanks for coming by to read and comment.
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