Write a few small poems that are purely image. Do not interject yourself or your thoughts into your few lines of clear and exact image. Just describe. Do not allow in abstractions. Do not address the reader. Notice particulars. Make every word count.
Sunlight dances in silver slippers
where the whale disappeared.
The sun rises
on the wings of seagulls.
The sky itself is silent.
Seagulls are noisy children
of the sky.
Circus animal clouds
parade under the big-top sky.
8 comments:
Oooo. All of these are really nice! I especially like the first one.
haha noisy children of the sky....i like that...these are cool...but i wanna know where the whale went...smiles.
Very nicely done. I do love those silver slippers.
Nicely done, I liked it.
lovely - i can see that big topped sky...bkm
Time's a wastin' Pauline! Did you get my phone #? I won't bug you any more after this. If you have time though.....
Hi Pauline:
Your "big-top sky" reminded me of Dylan's "Tambourine M<an" - Where he sings "To dance beneath a diamond sky, with one hand waving free."
Fine imagery."
Takle a look at my poem "On April." I wroter it in mid-March, but your post before this one inspired mel as a result,I completely re-wrote it.
Cheers!
Tabor - thanks. Writing to a prompt is always fun!
Brian - lol. You weren't watching!
Hilary - I've used those words before but they are so apt!
OOTP - thank you. Can't wait to get more computer time so I can come visit the prairie!
BKM - an extended image. There was this clous that looked just like an elephant!
Molly - I got your phone number today and called (Wednesday). Left you a message. Did you get it?
Marc - as soon as I'm home I will check it out! Thanks.
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